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Early Morning Run by The Seine – inspired by Cartier Bresson
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Taken early morning in September looking down on the banks of the Seine. The spire of Notre Dame can be seen in the background. Inspired by Henri Cartier Bresson’s photo below.
Do you think the photo is too busy?
EDIT : I’ve moved the jogger to make her stand out more.
Here is the shot before the edit.
Loosely inspired by this Henri Cartier Bresson photo.
Hi Barry. I like the unusual shooting angle used in second shot & the sense of speed from the cyclist, but it looks as if it was captured on a camcorder with the pixelation in the rails. #1 the subject running doesn’t seem to be in sharp focus and the processing doesn’t do anything for me to be honest. Maybe if I was familiar with Cartier Bresson’s photo I would appreciate it more. :oops: I must look up his stuff. :wink:
Thanks for the comments Miki. Just to clarify that the second shot is Henri Cartier Bresson’s and I could only find it in a low resolution hence the pixelisation.
I think what you are doing is a good idea.
I wouldn’t feel that the shot is too busy as such, it is certainly crowded but has a lot of paris icons in it, banks of the seine, pont neuf (?), leafy street, and is it notre dame? not sure….anyways, it is 100% Paris and that is good.
For me, your shot lacks symmetry, the angles of the wall of the stairway against the bridge and the church steeple seem to clash against each other. Also, I think the figure running is much too far away to give it the same impact. But I do think its a good idea. From what I know, HCB would take a thousand shots to get a good one, an expensive habit in the predigital days.
Hi Barry,
I like the shot and I think it does give
a sense of the place.I’m no expert on HCB but I can appreciate what
you were trying to do and I think you haven’t
done too bad.I think it would have been better if the figure had
been photographed a few steps before in the
lighter area.
The figure would also then cast a nice shadow.Parts of the top portion of the image looks a little
light to my eye.Any way all in all a good effort and I look forward to
seeing more.Cheers.
John.
I like this Barry. Never a bad thing to be inspired by HCB in my book. I actually think the shot works well…I like how all the elements fit together and I like the movement in the person at the bottom of the steps. I’m sure in a larger format they would not look so small in the frame either.
Have to say also, I enjoyed Mika’s critique of HCB’s shot. Gave me a giggle that did ;-)
Robbie
Ah the first ones much better alright :D :mrgreen:
Seriously though, a top class shot.
T.
Hi Barry,
I think the edited image is better.
Well done.I would suggest that when you post a modified image you leave the original
image as well.
Our comments will make little sense if the photograph we are referring to is
no longer visible.cheers.
John.
I agree about leaving the original. It can be good to compare with the edited one.
I liked the original one but I don’t know what is different in the new one.
By the way, what do mean by “moved the jogger”?
I’m not sure about this…
Compositionally it works… but at a guess I’d say the person in the scene may not have been in the original photograph, the scale and the shadow just seems odd.
If this is the case then I’m not sure that this is photography the way HCB would have meant it to be.
It also smells of HDR… and I just can’t relate a photo to a HCB original when HDR has been involved in the production.
Of course… I’m putting my neck on the line here… and these assumptions could be wrong.
nfl-fan wrote:
Of course… I’m putting my neck on the line here… and these assumptions could be wrong.
Never…can’t believe it ;-)
Nice idea and its a nice picture postcard scene…. BUT…. the runner doesn’t look convincing at all. The figure is way to small. Either its Photo-shopped from somewhere else in the pic and not scaled appropriately or you’ve captured an unusually small person approaching some unusually big steps… :shock:
Not a Cartier Bresson but it had/has potential…!
Richie
Really like the second image, with the motion taking away from it just a little for me. Would love to see the cyclist frozen with a faster shutter speed, but c’est la vie :)
The first image, there’s too many things vying for my attention for me. It’s not an excess of visual content I feel, but the brightness range. I believe NFL mentioned HDR. I would definitely like to see a lower contrast version of this image, perhaps with some selective burning/ vignetting to guide the eye a little.
Great shots though, and fantastic material to work on. I’m sure you enjoyed Paris, and woud love to see more of your images from the trip,
EDIT: Nice composition with a wide, by the way – were you shooting with a 24/ 28mm ?
EDIT 2: would like to see the point of focus a little further back in the second image. The railings feel as if they’re the point of focus, even factoring in the motion blur.
Again though, nice efforts,
Damien
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