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Fog bank
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I went out a few weeks back to get a sunrise in Donegal, and this was the scene that met me…
Too much water maybe?I also got this 5 minutes up the road…. no sun at all :(
– I know tha the horizon looks curved.. but I nearly sure that it is not…(mods: if these are too large let me know and I will reduce them. At the smaller size there is no detail at all to see).
Hi Kieran. I don’t know what is wrong with these TBH. #1 maybe too much water, not sure. I don’t know what the two items on the right are, but they seem too far away to be interesting and therefore I find them distracting. There is no foreground point of interest either. I do like the colours though. #2 is a bit better IMO. I can make out the bouy (Is that what they are called?). The horizon however seems to be half way up the picture and I don’t think this helps. The colours in this are not as nice but I still like them. Again there is no foreground interest. Sorry I can’t be more positive, especially after you getting up early to take them. :cry:
Thanks for the comments. The reason for posting these is to get the flaws – so I really do appreciate the feedback.
I totally agree with the first – too much water. I was going to crop it before posting but thought that I would leave it as is. I agree that the buoys are too distant to get any detail out of them, but when you crop closer it doesn’t improve the image as I wanted somthing more minimalistic. This is also the reason for no foreground interest….. not sure I achieved what I set out for but still trying :)
Similar approach to no.2 – going for something more simplistic. I do not think that it works as is, but I still keep coming back it…. that’s why I posted. I like the concept but can’t seem to get the execution right.
Kieran.
Definitely worth trying again. I think if the fog bank itself had been closer they could have been better. Not sure what else would help, Possibly a lower viewpoint if that was possible? More sky with the fogged out sun maybe? Keep at it that’s the best thing.
I like the first one a lot, Kieran. It’s a very calm image and very typical of thatkind of muted early morning you can get in Donegal – and I like the colours.
For me, the 2 spars do provide a focal point and the foreground waves lead the eyes towards them – almost as if you’re in a boat heading out to them.
Interesting use of the rule of thirds – with the third across the upper part of the image (as opposed to the traditional placement in the lower section).
Maybe tone burn/dodge the light reflecting off the sea on the left (not sure if that would improve balance) and remove the “spec” in the foreground?
All in all, though, I like it. Try printing it …
The second one doesn’t work quite as well, but there is a great sense of isolation. Maybe clone out the buoys near the buoy, fix the burnt sky and try to up the saturation a tad?
Thanks for the comments Brian. I must admit that the first could do with more work, but it does look much better when blown up large.
The second is a bin shot, but the site is worth going back to. I remember Cathal got a brilliant shot from this spot last year…. “Moville Light” if I remember….not that is a shot worth replicating. I think that this is the link … but as I am at work all images are blocked so I have no idea what I just linked to!
I’d argue the point that the first picture does have a foreground interest, with all that lovely reflected light on the water,
and the soft movement.
I might like it better without the markers though, they are a bit distracting, for me.I’d probably say something the same about the second too, that I’d like it better without the marker thingys,
but I think with this kind of picture burnt highlights are completely unforgiving.I’d like to see where you go next with this, but don’t worry too much about compositional rules, or foreground interests,
they’re overrated in my opinion.Sinead
don’t worry too much about compositional rules, or foreground interests,
they’re overrated in my opinion.I’d be with Sinead on this one. Do what you do what feels best. Understand the rules, but understand how to break them effectively too…like you’ve done here.
I really like the second one. Personally I’d have fun in B&W and dodge/burn/vignette and generally feck about with it but it’s still effective as it is. The first doesn’t appeal as much to me but don’t take that as a judgement on the image.Alan.
Sinead, Alan,
thanks for taking the time to respond. Love the feedback and very useful advice.
Kieran.
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